A Critique of "Testing God"

http://dmccarthy618.blogspot.com/2011/11/testing-god-george-lucas-edition.html

I have to be honest, when I first saw the length of this story I felt a little bit overwhelmed.  However, I enjoyed it very much.  You did an excellent job creating suspense and keeping me wondering what was going to happen.  The dialogue was excellent and very realistic (considering the unrealistic situation taking place).  I wouldn't change anything about the conversation between Jack and Deborah.  It was very fluid, believable and thought-provoking. You had me guessing how Deborah could possibly convince Jack to give up.  As the story began, Jack certainly had the upper hand in the situation and you did a great job slowly turning the tables and building towards the climax where Deborah was finally able to convince him to shut down the forcefield.

My only suggestion would be to maybe add some more description of the characters and environment in the beginning.  I had trouble picturing exactly where the story was taking place.  Were they outdoors?  Did it take place in the future or was it present day, where we are to believe that Jack got his hands on some kind of advanced technology?  Perhaps a little bit more backstory?  However, considering the story is very dialogue-centric, it's possible this isn't actually necessary.

Definitely a recommended read!!